Hello.
My first question is, all your screenies are attached through the "view button", not embedded to the thread, so why did you put "56k warning"? Seems a bit pointless to me!
Anyway. The story is a little generic. I mean, SuperSmash TV was doing almost exactly the same thing 14 years ago. Still. I'm not really sure where your player is supposed to be. I mean, in one shot he is definately in a jungle. But then other screenies have spacestations with lighthouses on top, and all sorts of strange things going on.
It just looks a bit jumbled is all. Perhaps you need to expand the story a little, so that you have a better idea of where the action is going to take place?