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FPSC Classic Work In Progress / [LOCKED] The Invasion

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Posted: 3rd Feb 2009 20:55
Better. Much better. May I suggest that you replace the word potion with chemical, unless you are aiming for a magical feel to it. Just don't get any ideas.Lol

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Posted: 4th Feb 2009 00:15
Lol! That must be one of the worst story lines for a game I've ever come across. Good luck with that!

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Posted: 4th Feb 2009 01:17
Quote: "May I suggest that you replace the word potion with chemical"


Ok. I will replace the word potion with chemical.

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Posted: 4th Feb 2009 03:09
Still needs some work. Let me make sure I got this straight. This includes some suggestions and edits.

You work as a security gaurd (where?)

One day a worker named Erwin was fired (For what reason?)

He decided to take revenge for his demise. He creates a chemical (or maybe he is fired because he created a chemical.) that reverts the living to their primal instincts and waking the dead from the grave.

He (and some hired goons) manage to slip the toxin into the cafateiria, turning the workers into human-animals (Zombies preaty much, but more inventive sounding) and also spray the chemical into a local graveyard (maybe disgiused as a crop duster plane). The next day the transformation is completed and they are now zombies. Your parents are infected (How?) and turn on you. You are forced to kill them, hopeing as you do that your girlfriend is a survivor.

That sounds much more proffesional. Same storyline, with a few adjustments. Let me know what you think.

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Posted: 4th Feb 2009 03:28
Quote: "Lol! That must be one of the worst story lines for a game I've ever come across. Good luck with that"


Lol lmao/rofl my gosh i was looking at all the comments and yours was cruel but hilarious

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Posted: 5th Feb 2009 16:50
Remade story:


You play as a worker named Tommy. One day, he is late at work.
And your job is a security guard in the military base.
Everything was peaceful that day until a guy called "Erwin" gets fired for being so bad at math.

He decided to take revenge for his demise. He creates a chemical that reverts the living to their primal instincts and waking the dead from the grave.

He (and some hired goons) manage to slip the toxin into the cafeteria, turning the workers and customers into human-animals (Zombies pretty much) and also spray the chemical into a graveyard. A few hours later, the transformation is completed and they are now zombies. Your parents are infected (because they drink some tea) and turn on you. You are forced to kill them, hoping that your girlfriend is a survivor.


Later that day,
some people did not eat yet and were enjoying Jerry Seinfeld's talk show, the zombies came and bit everyone. Including Jerry Seinfeld.

But there are still some survivors!

It is up to you to save the survivors and stop the..... INVASION!!

Or..............

Will you become one of the zombies?

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Posted: 5th Feb 2009 20:03
Cool I like you story!

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Posted: 5th Feb 2009 21:19 Edited at: 5th Feb 2009 21:20
OK, what is with Jerry Seinfield? It's not important at all!

You're getting better but I'm going to offer my ideas too, since I imagine you just want to get on with the game.

AE's take:

You are a security guard called Kurt Morgan. In your youth, you hastily joined the army but found basic trainning very hard. On the eve of your deployment in Iraq, you fled, and went in to hiding, eventually returning home under a new name: Tommy Scholes.

You became a security guard for the Ryachem Corporation, a major chemical company subcontracted by the government to investigate new nerve-gases for the army. Being close to something military makes you feel better about your army days; as you see, you are in some small way, doing your part.

One day, you turn up early for your shift. Your life is lived in routine. You check in, you talk to Carl the CCTV operators, you have a cup of coffee in the cafeteria. Today, you also see an enraged employee storm out of the building having been fired.

Your shift is long and boring, and you somehow wish for more excitement in your life.

- - - -

The next day you turn up for your shift and, when talking to Carl, it is revealed that a lot of the work force have been suffering from food poisoning since lunch. Some of them are still in the bathrooms now. You are told that you should search the building to make sure no one needs medical attention.

On your search, you find that what these people are sick with, it is much worse that mere food poisoning. They try to attack you, but you fight back. Some of the poisoned workers escape the facility and go out in to the city. As you try to chase after them, you meet Carl again, who has been fighting off attacks from the workers while you've been gone. He is injured, and looking at little ill but he is still 'human'. As he leads you out of the facility, he finally tips over the edge and tries to kill you (Boss Fight!)

- - - -

Having killed Carl, you go out in to the city. Your first move is to warn your girlfriend, Michelle, of the imminent attack. She is worried about you and tells you to go to your parent's house and protect them; you are also to call her when you get there.

You fight across the city to your parent's house. You defend the house from a horde of attacking zombies, but not well enough. Your parents are poisoned and turn into zombies and you have to kill them. Then you call Michelle. She can see the invasion of poisoned people outside and knows she won't hold out for long.

You travel across the city to find her. On the way, you meet other survivors who are banding together to form a resistance.

Eventually, you get to Michelle's apartment and rescue her. You and her then join the resistance so that you can fight your way to an airfield. Once there, you meet a hostage taken by the resistance, Erwin Breshnev, the man fired from Ryachem the previous day. It is revealed that he was the one who poisoned the workers at Ryachem. You are livid; he is responsible for not only the death of Carl, but also of your parents. However, you can't kill him because he is being forced at gun-point to engineer an antidote to the poison, which can be sprayed from the air over the city.

He must defend the airfield from a large attack. Erwin finishes his antidote, and is immediately detained. You must escort Erwin to be executed. However, he takes Michelle hostage and tries to escape. Suddenly, a zombie that survived the attack lurches at them both and poisons them. You must kill Erwin before it is too late. You do so.

Michelle is doomed. Having been injured by the zombie, there is nothing more you can do to save her...unless...the antidote! You must the antidote and give it to Michelle. It will prove if it works or not. Thankfully, it does. The rest of the antidote is loaded into a transport plane (Hercules, perhaps?) and sprayed over the city.

Those poisoned people will recover within a few hours, and there will be no long lasting damage to them. A new day dawns. You face it with the only important person left in your life; Michelle.

The End.

- - - -

Will that do?

AE

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Posted: 5th Feb 2009 21:43
Cool. Nice story! I will use that as my games plot.

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Posted: 5th Feb 2009 22:26
Well, I'm trainning to become a filmmaker, so I'm good at coming up with cinematic storylines like that one. It's just applying a bit of Syd Field...

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Posted: 6th Feb 2009 01:42
You should take the part out where you have to kill friends and family. That is WRONG.

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Posted: 6th Feb 2009 15:36
No. You have to because they will bite you then you will turn evil!
Or they will kill you.

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Posted: 6th Feb 2009 17:16
do something like in 28 days later where his parents have killed themselves that would make you relate to the character more than just killing them :S

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Posted: 6th Feb 2009 18:22
I repeat you should not have to kill the parents. THAT IS WRONG. they should be survivors.

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Posted: 6th Feb 2009 18:31
Alright, well perhaps Tommy doesn't have to kill his parents, but the zombies do instead.

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Posted: 6th Feb 2009 18:36 Edited at: 6th Feb 2009 18:40
Much better. I really like the idea of your game other than kill parents/friends.
Oh, and change your signature. You'll get better as you practice!

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Posted: 6th Feb 2009 22:31
I agree with The Shooter, practice makes *almost* perfect.

I've been using FPSC for years now, and can make pretty cool looking levels. Once the Migration comes out, I can finally make that water treatment plant from FEAR.

But, aside from that, you need to work on your levels more, TFPSCR!. Make it look more horror-like. Look at DS or HZG for more inspiration.

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Posted: 7th Feb 2009 18:13
Alright!

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Posted: 7th Feb 2009 22:30
Fps creator rocks, Please change your signature. you will get better. wen i first started, my levels stunk, but i'm getting better. I think your game will be good!

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Posted: 8th Feb 2009 14:15
Look at my signiture

I am practicing modeling stuff and texturing stuff.
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Posted: 8th Feb 2009 20:02
Quote: "Everything was peaceful that day until a guy called "Erwin" gets fired for being so bad at math. "


Stupid reason

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Posted: 9th Feb 2009 03:55 Edited at: 9th Feb 2009 03:56
Much better. dont discourage yourself by saying your bad at something.
Edit:i'm interested in your game so keep us posted!

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Posted: 9th Feb 2009 15:00
Ok.

I am practicing modeling stuff and texturing stuff.
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Posted: 9th Feb 2009 15:00
I am going to post a screenie soon. (If I don't forget)

I am practicing modeling stuff and texturing stuff.
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Posted: 9th Feb 2009 21:10 Edited at: 9th Feb 2009 21:11
screenie 5 (Level 1 remade!)

EDIT: I forgot to post a screenie!


EDIT: posted!

I am practicing modeling stuff and texturing stuff.

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screenie 6

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General Jackson
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Posted: 9th Feb 2009 23:44 Edited at: 10th Feb 2009 00:05
I was only able to see the second, the first didnt work for me. the second looks good though. where did you get the fence?

Edit:just looked at your, 'i'm so sad' post. well, i agree you should honor your parents and respect their wishes. I HATE gore and even blood in games and theres plenty of other people i know that do too. i have all blood removed from my games.

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Quote: "where did you get the fence?"


In segments/model pack 3

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Posted: 10th Feb 2009 21:55
thx.

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the screenies are pretty good but you need lighting real bad. It makes it look a lot better.

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Quote: "You might get sued by whoever made Dawn of the Dead, I'd change the name if I were you."


lol they can't sue if the game is free of charge if he made people pay for the game then he could get sued but if its free he can copy anything he wants
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Posted: 11th Feb 2009 14:41
Really? Well I don't want that name anymore. What can I name my game?
"Food poison?"

Paint.net creates dumb textures they look like kid cartoons! Even worse!
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Ok.

Paint.net creates dumb textures they look like kid cartoons! Even worse!
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Posted: 11th Feb 2009 14:43
Actually demo is not coming until I'm done level 2 and 3.

Paint.net creates dumb textures they look like kid cartoons! Even worse!
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Can you make a normal signature fps creator rocks? that one is goofy.

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Posted: 11th Feb 2009 18:24
ok

How do people make awesome textures? Paint.net sucks
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Posted: 11th Feb 2009 21:25
I doubt I'll be playing this game. No offense. Just, I respect those who try to innovate with their projects, and not just give FPSC users a bad name by releasing games that should be made with the 3D Game Maker. Like I said, no offense.

Please contact me if you are looking for someone to compose the music for your games.
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Posted: 11th Feb 2009 23:10
What is with you people and signatures? I don't even look at them anymore. Stop getting so off-topic and pay attention to the thread PLEASE.

FPSCR, I think all of us would appreciate more screenshots.

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TFPSCR!, prehaps you should brush up on your level design, lighting, and all that good stuff.

I agree with TDT_99, work hard on your game, you'll get amazing results.

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Posted: 12th Feb 2009 17:18
Ok!


Working...

How do people make awesome textures? Paint.net sucks
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Posted: 14th Feb 2009 18:33 Edited at: 14th Feb 2009 18:35
I think beta demo 1 will be released in a few days. If you didn't read the first two words, I said "I think"

EDIT: I will have 2 levels in the demo

I can't texture. I'm not an artist.
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Posted: 15th Feb 2009 16:10
Demo delayed! Error message! Read my post "V1.15 error message"
And I will actually have 3 levels.

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Posted: 15th Feb 2009 16:14
Help!

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ok, if theres a prob with v1.15 go back to v1.14

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k

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lol they can't sue if the game is free of charge if he made people pay for the game then he could get sued but if its free he can copy anything he wants"


They can sue you if you infringe upon any copyright and/or trademark, If it is a registered copyright/Trademark of their company even if you release it for free you infringing upon the copyright.

Quote: "Copyright infringement (or copyright violation) is the unauthorized use of material that is covered by copyright law, in a manner that violates one of the copyright owner's exclusive moral rights, such as the right to reproduce or perform the copyrighted work, or to make derivative works."

Quote: "Moral rights enable a copyright holder to "object to any distortion, mutilation, or other modification of, or other derogatory action in relation to, the said work, which would be prejudicial to his honor or reputation."[17] The US expressly stated in the Implementation Act that no other right (i.e. the 1st Amendment) shall be impacted by acceptance of the Convention"


Quote: "Trademark infringement is a violation of the exclusive rights attaching to a trademark without the authorization of the trademark owner or any licensees (provided that such authorization was within the scope of the license). Infringement may occur when one party, the "infringer", uses a trademark which is identical or confusingly similar to a trademark owned by another party, in relation to products or services which are identical or similar to the products or services which the registration covers. An owner of a trademark may commence legal proceedings against a party which infringes its registration."


So 'Lol' to you sir.

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Posted: 17th Feb 2009 23:54
I will upload the demo in two weeks.

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Posted: 20th Feb 2009 18:09
I am not working on this game anymore until Easter. Because I am making two games for both the SciFi contest, and the Horror contest.

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Posted: 24th Feb 2009 14:37
Mods don't lock this because I am not working on this game UNTIL EASTER.

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Working on another game called dungeon escape for the fpns contest.

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