Im pretty sure im allowed to post up my work for crit, wheather i get though lol

but help would be nice, even if its just bashing it to pieces.
So far i have churned together this;
The World From Behind A Mask
Oscar Wilde said best, "Give a man a mask and he'll tell you the truth"
With the exponential growth of technology and means of communication, it is not surprising there are those who would take advantage of such a resource that is the internet, nevertheless abuse it. As more and more people gain access to the World Wide Web, we see new and interesting trends within our social interactions of which, some are not for the best. With an unending tidal rise in abuse or ‘flame rates’ more and more community forum sites are switching to terms and conditions of use, where violating these rules can lead to a revoke of site access. This maintains order and stabilises a hierarchy giving users direction. Though, in the last self proclaimed ‘free’ bastions of the internet it’s quite the opposite. These sites are a chaos mass of actions and reactions normally with no discernable order social order. This has lead to the impersonal and distanced use of the internet and to the creation of ‘annon’ the slang abbreviation anonymous, where users are now masked en-masse and their actions unchecked. This in itself is the source of most social problems we now face in modern world.
For this assignment, I have chosen to exam a single particular site that has become renowned for its reputation. It has changed our language use, fought for freedom of speech, flooded the video giant YouTube with explicit content as a show of force against filtering music, and hacked into government websites who harassed users under the cover of copyright infringement. For most, these could be seen as admirable goals but for the laundry list of reasons there is only one ideal that could be applicable, ‘i did it for teh lolz’ and the urban dictionary provides the most widely used definition;
"I did it for the lulz" (IDIFTL) is a catchphrase which serves as an explanation for any trolling you do or any internet drama you cause. -By EDiot-Urban Dictionary-Dec 26, 2006-(Source 1). Though it must be said, this phrase is so widely used that its meaning is interpreted differently by each user but its basic use is clear, ‘Because we could’.
The site at forefront of these unconceivable actions is one called 4chan, with approximately 650,000,000 posts per month, according to an online forum statistical tracker. (See source 2) This sprawling mass of users has lead to it being held in high regards by the very worst and best of people. Why would I choose such an area to cover? It’s easy; sites such as these are a driving force to change our society and perceived right and wrong. People openly speak their mind on any topic without fear of persecution, though significant traits are exacerbated, people can see ideals, however dirty and unfounded being formed by a conglomerate mass of users.
More What it is + history //rules
How it affects.
Issues
Conclusion.
Right it seems preachy, but thats because ive sugar coated it as much as i could. We all know what 4chan really is, an ill tear it down as soon as ive built it up enough to get a good intrest brewing. I still need to find a paper/journal and a book that i can use in this, but im struggling to find one. Im off to harass the hell outa my tutors tommorow but for now im stuck in a rut and i cant get further. Its like its killing my soul right now. Ive set out todo headers and hoping 500 words a section but i just keeping going back to the stupid introduction and keep changing it. If anything seems amiss or even if you could point me in the right direction for a source it would be greatly appreciated.
Thanks anyway

-Con