Well, I decided to take a shot at writing a poem for remembrance day. Mind you, I haven't written poetry in a bit. I'm not sure if anyone will take interest, but if you like poetry, please read and critique. There are three things that concern me: 1. Is the capitalization of the title correct? 2. In the refrain, should it be lay instead of lie? 3. Is "Where vultures linger for more to die" grammatically correct?
To Be a Hero
A young man listens, intrigued by a story
That his brother recites, of fighting for glory
Of preserving the peace and slaughtering brutes
Though he no longer fights, still shines his boots
With his passionate smile and persuasive charm
He reenacts the tale of how he lost his arm
The young man is determined to join the game
Though he doesn’t notice, his brother hides pain
This is for those who were left alone
This is for those who never came home
This is for those who sought the fate
Of a hero, now lie where poppies grow
His mother cries and yearns but fight, he must
For freedom is not free and life is not just
Uniform unsoiled, he stands tall and proud
To fight for his country is what he vowed
Distressed at the sight, but still remains bold
Sweat pours from his face, yet his insides are cold
He peers upon the horizon, as bullets race by
One catches his shoulder, now the end is nigh
This is for those who were left alone
This is for those who never came home
This is for those who sought the fate
Of a hero, now lie where poppies grow
A dead body marks a quest unfulfilled
Still lie, inert, where he was killed
A somber blanket draped across the sky
Where vultures prepare for more to die
The contention persists but is never won
Though the last shot fires; the day is done
Now, hallow the ground on which he fought
And immortalize the hope in which he brought
This is for those who were left alone
This is for those who never came home
This is for those who sought the fate
Of a hero, now lie where poppies grow
