Thanks everyone for replying!
Quote: "That was awesome Lol is this kind of inspired from Kingdom Hearts ?"
Nope, I've never played it. This is a fairly generic opening though.
Quote: "Abstract. But very cool. "
Yep, I like abstract stuff. Those black things are made from ink brush.
Quote: "I'm not a fan of the art--- the perspective of the people's bodies seem a little messed sometimes, and the story is a bit cliche, but it's creative all the same."
JEKU IS MEAN
No, but I seriously get what you mean about the bodies being messed up somethimes, that's why I need this sort of practice. This is the first time I've drawn over 70 human figures in a comic, and in less than two weeks, no less (mostly in one weekend, and I mean EVERY HOUR of one weekend). And could you point out the places where you find the perspective most strange? I'm curious to see if you found the same places as me. And yeah, the story of part one is quite generic. Part two is an interesting metaphor, but I'm sure some sort of variation of it has already been done. I might make part two, as this as a whole is sort of a redoal of Trimotion, a 16 page comic I got 4 pages into, and I'd like to finish it. I want to try a funny story before I get into something as dark and serious and part two though. I might make the first arc of MODslinger into a short graphic novel- like say 19 pages, standard for stuff like manga.
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Quote: "Also I'd have someone edit some of the text as there are some grammatical errors (i.e. "stocking" instead of "stalking")"
That was fixed immediately after posting this. I basically show these to everybody I know, and I usually have someone check my text as I know how bad I am at spelling. It's just I was at the deadline for presenting, and I didn't have time for anything but a Microsoft word check. I suppose I'll upload the finished version of part one with the first and last pages when those are done.
I already did some color changes as well; as his hair and the umbrella are too dark (they were lighter in photoshop!!!).
Quote: "pretty cool. I know I could never draw that well."
Thanks! Though if you put about as much time into drawing as I did, you probably could. That's my philosophy, if you put enough effort into something, you’re bound to get good at it, even if you have no talent for said thing in the first place.
Quote: "Some perspective issues and I noticed 'stocking' instead of 'stalking' as well. Besides that, pretty cool!"
Like Jeku, could you point out where the perspective is strange? The main panel I know for certain is the last one, and I'd just been drawing so long at that point, I settled for making the bodies look like they were fairly in the right spot instead of getting the perspective right. I also drew that single panel on a table, where the rest were drawn on an easel, which after doing it that way, I can't imagine trying to do a full page like these on a desk anymore.
So did anyone notice the compositional work? That's the biggest part of the comic. Each panel, page, and the whole thing should end up as a [pretty solid composition. I was pretty careful to control the flow of time, too.
So peeps, here’s the plan I came up with 3 minutes ago: I'll draw the first arc of MODslinger as a chapter size comic or so, using a bunch of tricks I learned to make the time in the comic not feel rushed. Then I'll do the second part of this comic. After that I'll either do one more test comic to get my bearings, or I'll decide I'm ready for my main story and draw A Wanderer Comes, the first story I plan to tell in Fabel Nux.
