i'm just going to be honest and say what i think. I hope i sound constructive, not like some idiot that wants to insult because that's not my intention at all.
you seem to shake the camera way to much, it's not enjoyable to watch when the camera shakes. The music at the beginning completely drowns the dialouge, i can barely make out what they're talking about. At 0:30 the camera seems to move away from the 2 dudes, i dont know where but i think you could have cut that out... Also i dont like the way the camera seems to be moving and shaking to much when there's talking in the scene where they are sitting. At the part when the lights go out i can barely see what's happening.
The storyline isn't very otrginal, i think it's easy to think of better storylines than "The bad guy kills the (good?) guys for some reason". You should really sit down and write a script or something, and spend some time doing that.
You probably hate me now for saying all this. At the time i was starting to make music i got alot of comments like these and at the time i didnt like them but now i know they all did help me and i hope i'm helping you by saying all this.
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