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Skydog
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Posted: 11th Oct 2008 02:55 Edited at: 11th Oct 2008 07:18
Quote: "WAR ZONE

WAR! The year is 2011 and America has been at war with Russia for the past year. Terrorist assaults have occurred in Washington D.C and New York in the past 6 months. Rumor has it that North Korea has begun to develop WMD’s for the Russians.

July 27, 2011:
A special Anti-Terrorism unit of the military code-named “Ground Pounders” was sent to a hotspot in Moscow.

July 30, 2011:
Contact with “Ground Pounders” was lost.

August 3, 2011:
Sgt. Alex Rhodes of “Ground Pounders” was able to transmit a message. It read:

Hello? Command are you hearing me? If you’re getting this, this is Sgt. Rhodes. Everyone else in my unit is KIA. I’ve been able to fight my way through Russian soldiers and I need immediate evac. I’ll send my coordinates shortly. I repeat This is…Rhodes…unit KIA…Immediate evac… as follows…

The transmission ends there… "






This is my first full game made with FPSC. It will have 8-10 levels and I will be releasing it in 2 level intervals. I hope I can recieve dome good C&C about this.

Skydog

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Mazz426
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Location: Edinburgh
Posted: 11th Oct 2008 11:26
some pretty nice screens keep it up

gamer for life
CoffeeGrunt
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Location: England
Posted: 11th Oct 2008 12:34
Story needs a little work, but the screens are awesome!

Skydog
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Posted: 11th Oct 2008 21:01
Thanks Mazz and CG!

Coffeegrunt-Do you have any tips pn how I can improve my story?

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Pbcrazy
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Location: ...pillow room...
Posted: 14th Oct 2008 03:18
add some more detail into the story, names of streets, other members of the unit, who you are, if you are still Sgt. Rhodes, tell us how you got to the certain area. etc.

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