Okay here is my little review
Well first off the dialog is very sloppy and kind of random.
A good example of the above statement:
Is it true you have many information's to share with me?
You are kinda quit can we hang out later?
After asking this I found her saying she would like to have sex with me but I need to find my sister.
A. I didn't ask for sex, I asked to hang out.
B. I didn't even know I had a missing sister
I would suggest that you clean up the Dialog alot.
Second thing is the camera, I found my self looking through walls A LOT of the time. I also found I could hoover when I crouch XD
Lastly: the gun is very slow to respond, when I click I have to wait a few seconds before it actually shoots.
On the up side:
The Levels are well set up, could use more explanation for why I am there but the environments are nice.
The characters eye candy to say the least, very well done, art wise.
Lighting was good, the flashlight was a great tool and very helpful.
Over all, there is a lot to be fixed but it is a very good start!