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Geek Culture / Dormancy

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Seppuku Arts
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Posted: 19th Oct 2005 20:33
Uhhh this is a story written by me as part of a competition entry on the renderosity.com writers challenge.


And well, why not share with this *cough* 'charming' society.



-Dormancy-

By Bryn Price AKA Seppuku Arts/Seppuku05

My mind is my sanctuary. A sacred place where I hide from the real world, yet I do not what I am hiding from and which world is the real world, is the dream world a nightmare or am I living the nightmare and seek refuge in the dream world? These are unanswered questions.

I stand machine like staring into the descending mirror, deepening my thoughts, thinking about myself and the world I live in. Surrounding me is a tenebrous room concealing the cravasses of insignificant items. In this life, I live in repetition of daily tasks and a lingering curse of an ignorant tiredness, even now my eyelids hold concrete weighing me down desiring deep lethargy.

By day I work in a factory producing vehicle parts among several sleep craving zombies. Routinely I control the machines as a puppeteer with puppets, Repeating the same thing over and over, show by show, until the resevoir of joy dries up.
In this world I feel no emotions, the neutral of the worlds.

I turn against the mirror, now polar to a stone matress bed, ready to repose, fearing of the location where I will wake up in the morning.
I Career forward, with a single step I am forced to stop by a cold drowning superstition pulling the temperature down the rusty pool ladder. Shivering, rubbing my hand together for insulation a black shadow lays before my feet. Unable to move I gape at the shadow as paranoia bullies me to locomate, but my legs make a stubborn signal of ignorance. The shadow embosses into a lump, a lump growing taller rapidly, blistering my view, still ever growing my mind visually analyzes the shadow, upon sudden recognition I soon realise this shadow is no shadow, but a black cloak worn by something appearing from nowhere. Paralyzed I close my eyes denying what was going on, hoping to wake up in a land far away, but hope dies away in my dithering soul. With curiosity I open my eyes once again, there, gargantuous, standing before me a spectral figure gripping tight a scythe, immediate conclusions point only to Death. He has come for me, but how did I die? I see no recall of the event of death, no! I am not dead. Denial gives my muscles motion once again, I haste out of my apartment door, down the hall and sprint at optimum speed down the stairs and fiercefully out of the entrance. I come to an almost sudden halt, seeing the industrial town I have become accustomed to no longer exists, replacing it, skulks a downward spiral trailing down the abyss, fearfully I abscond down the spiral. Never ending I carry on, hoping to wake up in another place, trying to tear my self away from this nightmare, but what if this nightmare is real, am I really running from Death? Is it really my time to go? Exhausted, I cease running, for recovery, panting with my hands on knees. Nervous and frightened, apocalyptic denticulate shades circle me like vultures over a dying animal.

Confused, I observe my surroundings looking for an escape route, it is ineviatable, I face my fate, boldy standing straight keeping my eyes acute to the reapperance of Death. He holds his scyth high. Read to strike. I close my eyes to make the pain more bearable. I wait for the pain. I feel no pain. I stand sightless waiting for it all to end. Still nothing. Gradually my eye open, no longer does death prepare to take my life, but a brighr white light, I no longer stand strenuously, but lay comfortably, no longer do I feel scared, but feel warm. I can hear voices drifting away into the distance as my vision clears up, this white light is the cushoined ceiling smiling back at me. I try to stand up but no success as my hands are tied by white coloured clothing. This is it, I am in the safe world, the happier place, as once again I return to reality, which strikes me cold discolouring my face, there is no emotionless plain, no outside fearful abyss swarmed with spectres. Relieved by the white softness of a box around me, I finally understand what is real again.

For now.

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Oolite
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Posted: 19th Oct 2005 20:41
Big Well done!
I have said this already to you through msn already though

I like it

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Posted: 19th Oct 2005 20:41
It looks like its going to be a paper describing yourself by the start of it but then instead moves into a story about you which is kind of different. Other than that it is damn good. Great Work!

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Seppuku Arts
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Posted: 19th Oct 2005 20:46
Thanks very much appreciate the comment, A of S, the character isn't supposed to be me, just is I to involve the personal emotions of the character, and the character can be anyone

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Jimmy
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Posted: 19th Oct 2005 20:53
You is cwazy dawg!

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Posted: 20th Oct 2005 00:21
So depressing...
Anyway well written besides the spelling errors.

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Posted: 20th Oct 2005 00:52
Quote: "spelling errors."

Try writing on paper on my desk, so evil, and well I typed it up word for word, so the mistakes stay there, will replace it with an editing from the school computers as they have a better place for working, my room sux for the working atmosphere

Quote: "Anyway well written "

Thanks much

Quote: " So depressing..."

Glad to hear it, wanted to give the effect of a sad lonely man/woman in a mental institute. Glad to hear I got what I went for

Quote: " You is cwazy dawg!"

I'm guessing thats a good thing, so I'll just say thanks for the comment nodding

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Posted: 20th Oct 2005 01:58
I thought you hated emos.

Just joking. Really detailed me likes.

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Posted: 20th Oct 2005 03:39
Badly needs proper spelling, grammar and indentation, but it's well written, so good job

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Posted: 20th Oct 2005 06:03 Edited at: 20th Oct 2005 06:03
Seppuku Arts,

I do not enjoy crazy thoughts, due to my past of drugs, which I am now far far away from. However, I do love poetry and emotionfull writings.

A man is a good writer when he can enlarge an emotion in some one temporarily, just through words. You did just that. Good job to you. Keep up the creativity!



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Posted: 20th Oct 2005 06:37
what a masterpeice no bit of writing made me picture something as if it was happening. thanks for that. and good luck

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Posted: 20th Oct 2005 17:24
Quote: "Badly needs proper spelling, grammar and indentation, but it's well written, so good job "

You're not the first to mention, kinda awkward writing on paper with my desktop, and well I typed it up letter for letter, and well, my hand writing is so bad I can't even read it , but will correct those mistakes.


Quote: " I thought you hated emos"

Emos? They're okay, but this isn't emo writing, its a guy in a mental hospital and you see it through his eyes, an emo writing would be how listening to My Chemical Romance wants them to commit suicide (oh wait thats me! They're that bad IMO)



Quote: "You did just that. Good job to you. Keep up the creativity!"

Thank you very much

Quote: " what a masterpeice no bit of writing made me picture something as if it was happening. thanks for that. and good luck"

Why thanks

@NanoBrain, good thing you've gotten away from drugs, the only druggies I know are all chavs that are buggering up their life, good for them bloody chavs

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