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I just read your above post, this is exactly what Im talking about. Why do you take things so critically, this is supposed to help not discourage you. The tutorial so far is among the better ones I've seen and Im sure since you've put such a large amount of time into it it will get better as the reader progresses through the tutorial. Im-Not-Flaming-You, take it from an (experienced, if I do say so myself) tutorial writer, its got potential and I've only read the first few paragraphs. If you cant take critisism Id hate to see how you take actual flamage.
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I read up to the end of the third paragraph:
- It looks like you're pretty much summarazing what your computer science teacher tought you (it sounds almost exact to what my teacher tought us this year) (Out of nowhere you throw in the 1 and 0 theory behind programming, and then dont elaborate on it at all)
- You need to divide your sentences up into smaller ones, theres a lot of places you could have used periods or commas to stop from leaving an uneasy taste in the readers mouth after each sentence.
Also concider dividing your paragraphs up into smaller ones as well, Im not trying to be picky but my eyes began hurting midway through the second paragraph.
- Not sure if Bookwiki allows this but some images in there would be nice, even if they dont have anything to do with the current topic you could throw in some pics of a computer, maybe a funny quote here or there, you get the idea. Something to break the constant black and white feeling the page gives off.
Not much more to say right now, its an ok start but in all honesty it seems like you've stretched out a lot of information that could be summed up in a small paragraph or two, giving the same amoutn of information.
Goodluck with the tut, Ill try and read some more after school today but I've got a lot to do.
- RUC'
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You keep changing your posts! lol
Most "noobs" (shouldnt be using that word) get flamed by other "noobs" that think they're smart enough to critisize the other "noob". If you looked at the posts from the gurus and pros around the forums you'd see they only critisize in an intelligence and "un-noobish" manner, unless the post is extremely stupid and uncalled for, guru's wont flame.
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