My crits:
- The voice was pretty cheesy. I think it'd be WAY better if it were a female voice with a slight British accent. You know, like the ones they tend to use for AI computers in movies or the ones that say "Self Destruct Sequence, Initialized".
- The script was also pretty cheesy. "Cool Coder"... "A physics plugin, called, Dark Physics" (would sound more fluid if it were something like "Dark Physics, one of Dark Basic's most powerful plugins to date, allows you to easily incorporate real-world physics into your games."
- Spend more time talking about Dark Basic and FPSC, focus less on already made creations and T3DGM.
- A lot of shots could have been better planned out. The FPSC game shot for example, could have been from a better game. The FPSC X10 shot should have shown some of the editor in action at runtime, like changing the fluid heights or the physics on barrels and crates. Also the forums shot, really didnt get across how active these forums are. The one shot of the posts, showed a 1-sentence post from the same user over and over posting their screen shots. If you hadn't used these forums before, you wouldn't even know they were doing that.
- The video playing on start up is a hassle for a lot of people obviously. Id say instead, you should design a very clean-cut, attractive and eye-catching button, fairly big but not nearly as big as the video, allowing people to click it and have the video load in an alternate window or expand in that window and play.
