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FPSC Classic Work In Progress / [x9] The Abandoned

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JaredxD
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Posted: 14th Aug 2010 15:18 Edited at: 15th Aug 2010 03:28
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Hello everyone,
This is my first WIP game that I have posted here, so I really would like ANY C&C that you have!!

Please note that I am very new to level design though!

The Abandoned-
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JaredxD

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Working on it

I have one pic atm, but I'll get some more in a couple hours, quite busy.

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The starting room. (Comments please!!!!)

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AbdulAhad
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Posted: 14th Aug 2010 15:24 Edited at: 14th Aug 2010 15:25
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This looks nice! Very good entity placement!

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JaredxD
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Posted: 14th Aug 2010 16:59 Edited at: 14th Aug 2010 16:59
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Thanks!!

Here's one more pic for tonight.(this one is still a WIP)

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mgarand
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Posted: 14th Aug 2010 17:02
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i Like the screens, the story needs allot of work.



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Metal Devil123
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Posted: 14th Aug 2010 17:11
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The screenies look nice! The story is... well, it's more of a set up, than a story.


My old YouTube account got deleted. My new account is called MetalFPSC. thanks for your time!
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JaredxD
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Posted: 14th Aug 2010 18:43
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Haha I know, like I said, I'm no good at story writing.

But I'll give it another go tomorrow.

Glad you like the screens!
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Bugsy
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Posted: 14th Aug 2010 19:04
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the screens need to stop using stock yellow lighting. try to mix it up a bit. never use stock lights.

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vortech
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Posted: 14th Aug 2010 21:23
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Just what bugsy said. You should do something with your light range


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greysword
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Posted: 14th Aug 2010 22:21
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Cool Entity placement as Abdul said ....
the story is like any other zombie story try to make it bigger and attractive ..... for example 1980 scientists were doing the Longevity experiment to improve ppl's life at these days everyone was verey excited for that but noone could undestand how harmfull that expirement could be... 2009 this expirement was forgotten till the day John Galloway tried that on a human being ... after some days he realised that the human had some more powers than the real human ... faster ,powerfull, and thristy for blood..... 2010 the whole town has transformed to hungry terrors and this expirement that could make people live longer destroy them ALL except Frank Bucks an FBI AGENT. Can He Save the whole world from destruction and start a new life or not?

try something like that complicated that leads into something and leave a message in the end

keep it up !
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JaredxD
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Posted: 15th Aug 2010 00:29
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I didn't use stock lighting, im still tweaking it around.
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Nbt
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Posted: 15th Aug 2010 00:46
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You may want to make the light entities actually glow so they look like they are emitting the light under them??

I like the look and feel in the screens and the grungy textures go well

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JaredxD
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Posted: 15th Aug 2010 03:26
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What do you mean Nbt??

Make the light colour a bit more glow-ish??

Anyway glad you like the screens, it's my first game and I'm glad some people like it!!
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Nbt
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Posted: 15th Aug 2010 03:33
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No the actual light entity (the model of a ceiling light etc)

I have attached an example of a glowing light entity, so you can see what I mean.

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JaredxD
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Posted: 15th Aug 2010 08:46
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Ahh kk, I think I might have a couple glowing ish ones, Ill have a look
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JaredxD
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Posted: 22nd Aug 2010 13:31
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Kk, done a few new rooms, check em out!

Sorry for not having anything to show lately, been real busy.

Anyway, here's two new rooms, they are both a WIP.

Screen attached.

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Posted: 22nd Aug 2010 13:32
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And another:

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